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Really lovely new chapters, Mackie. The true dream feel of the dream was wonderful. I could smell the crisp snow. And you captured the wake-with-a start heart-in-mouth experience so well.

 

The fire play was such fun to read, but OH Hell! Talk about ill timing. It looks bad for our (anti)hero.

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Guest Sue

Love the last two chapters - completely absorbing; particularly the falcon and the arrow - really brought out the mixed emotions.

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More Loki!!! :flower::joy:

 

I loved Loki's dream - it's so vividly realised that I could see it clearly. And as Jude said, you captured the panic and disorientation of Loki waking from the dream perfectly.

And as for the fire - looks like our favourite rogue is in trouble again :lol:

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LOKI'S BACK! :rainbow: <-- this critter is going to get used a lot, you realise. :p

 

i want more of asgard!!! :jump2:

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:neutral:

 

(i need to get back to typing, i have written a lot more :p )

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oops. :manic: do I feel misunderstanding coming on?? I think our boy's gonna have to do some quick talking...

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well, i am all caught up on typing! now i can finally go back to writng :p

 

it is quite a huge chunk i put online, sorry to be so unwieldy … :blush2:

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Actually, I think, the bigger the chunks, the better :yes:

 

Less :waiting::evildb:

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Thanks for the heads-up....I'll go get some ice cream before starting.... :joy:

 

Oh my goodness gracious! That certainly ended with a bang! I am Hot enough here, thatk you very much. LOL!

 

Back to the beginning...The scene between Sigya & Laufey was so rich in the details, both physical and emotional. Especially the part in the village clearing as the fires were lit.

 

What is so lovely about your writing is you bring your photographer's eye to it. The many little details...like the old greyed ballet slippers...just help the reader connect so easily.

You make ordinary things have meaning. So much layering and texture.

 

The scene with Morganna is perfect. Snake and all!

 

2 more things: The icecream I picked was sugar & fat free...totally forgettable. The story I read was just the opposite. Rich and very memorable.

 

And...I want a bullwhip like that!

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:smooch: thank you! (i think Ben and the kids might have different ideas about you and a bull whip :p )

 

old ballet slippers always look totolly disreputable :lol:

 

i had to sketch Morganna and Loki because i kinda got entangled in all the arms involved :p i needed a visualisation like making a map.

 

(and Morgie is reading it, she gets the link each time i am posting :oh: )

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Guest Sue

 

:jump2: That will be my lunch time reading!!! yay!

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