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well, i've posted more. :p you should know by now that you need to be careful what you wise for. :p three posts of confusion won't make any difference. let 'em be. :flower:

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i like it a lot (so far :p )

i think the anonymous cellphone conversation is creepy and intriguing, not even knowing whether it is a man or a woman.

 

i also think that the short sms speak is working well here.

it almost reads like a conversation withher own subconscious.

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I like it a lot....it is like one of those really intriguing IFC shorts. Pulls me in.

I was laughing alot as I read it...the line about the Aunts wondering about sex and the porn discussion.

I have actually done that...known porn was available and planned to watch & just not gotten to it....can't really imagine a guy doing that!

 

The wrong number exchange is great. I want to know more.

 

I had no idea what sms was before starting this...text messaging, right? The short hand?

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jude, :smooch: yes, text messaging is sms. short for Simple Messaging Service. they're bastardising the language trying to write everything within 350 letters. :db:

 

thank you all. will post some more by tonight. :heart:

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oh, meant to say that i'm glad you found some of it funny. i didn't want it all 'serious'. hopefully it'll keep being a little absurd as it continues. :uhm:

 

posted some. and maybe in the midst of spas and dinners, i'll be able to get together some more for tuesday. :heart:

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This part so sad...but familiar. I know that clumsy puppy feeling. Like permanent adolescence. Graceful is an alien concept to me...I want to give her a hug. ( well you did say you wanted our feelings while reading it :lol: )

 

To me the white rug speaks volumes. Libraries!

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i like the absurdity. i like the butterflies. will they make another appearance? in some other guise (under the white rug?) - oh, maybe not.

i think the story is clever. messaging with the wrong number - like chatting with a kitchen-god or angel-on-shoulder.

i expected to see a sms at the end of the last one, following on the pattern of the previous. it was a nice combination of wrap of the one and segue to the other.

 

jude, libraries! speaking volumes! i just got it! :roll:

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